School Newsletter Needs Editor

Every week a school newsletter comes home. Every week I’m astonished by the writing.

We love Silas’s school. Silas loves it. It’s the best public school you could ask for. Except the newsletter.

The principal’s letter is always at the top. It’s always ¾ of a column in a small fancy script font. They should print it in a 15 point simple serif font. The most important parts — calendar changes — are always buried in the middle somewhere.

Mr. M— is a nice, nice guy. His heart is in the right place. Somewhere in graduate school, though (probably writing his master’s thesis), clarity gave way to verbosity.

Here’s the text from the letter in Friday’s edition:

Dear Parents and Community:

This was a busy week due to the two snow days we had last week! Play rehearsals and baseball and softball practice are in full swing. Our students wear multiple hats at times, so their schedules can get quite overwhelming for them. This is one of those times. This next week will be filled with play preparation as the ShowTime is swiftly approaching. For our older students, sports and drama will take up a lot of their time. Our senior class is preparing for their trip. Our Juniors are looking at college plans, many are also involved in fundraising activities for upcoming trips. For our younger students, grades 3-8 testing is approaching (April 1st) so preparation for that is taking place as well. As parents, we do our best to be sure that our children get the nutrition and rest they need while fulfilling responsibilities they have at home and at school. Our children learn from watching us, so our patience is valuable and helps our children to keep things in perspective. Thank you for your support!

A reminder that we will have school on Friday, April 11th and Thursday, April 22nd. Our International Night that was scheduled for March 13th has been moved to Thursday, April 3rd beginning at 5:30. Please be sure this update is included on your calendar.

Our next Budget Meeting is on Tuesday, March 25! This process is a lengthy one with many decisions to make that will impact us all. Please attend the meeting so you can be informed as the process moves forward for our 2014/15 school year budget. We have two Board Member terms expiring this year. If you are interested in being on the KCS Board of Education, please contact school to get the information you need to become a candidate.

The weather is always a topic as we begin to hope for some warmth and sunshine after this long period of ice and snow. We wish you a happy weekend regardless of the temperature!!

Mr. M—

342 words. Here’s my edit:

 Dear Parents and Community:

Because we had two snow days last week, we have several calendar adjustments. We will now have school on Friday, April 11 and Thursday, April 22. International Night will be on April 3 at 5:30pm. Please mark your calendars.

The next budget meeting for the 2014/15 year is on Tuesday, March 25. Decisions about the budget affect everyone. We hope you will be involved and stay informed.

Two positions on the Board of Education are up for election this year. If you want to be a candidate, please contact the school for information.

This is a busy time. Students’ schedules are packed. Play rehearsal and practice for baseball and softball, preparation and fundraising for class trips, and state testing for grades 3-8. Sometimes it can seem overwhelming to them, and to their parents. Please remember that students take their cues from the adults around them. Adequate rest and nutrition are essential. Perspective and patience go a long way.

As always, thank you for your support. We wish you a happy weekend regardless of the temperature!

Mr. M—

185 words.

Exactly.

One thought on “School Newsletter Needs Editor

  1. If you aren’t careful, someone will think you’re offering your skills…

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